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My sin, it brings me down again
My life, so full of pain and strife
My love, something I'll never reach
My thought, Something you cannot teach

Now or Never, it's my time to decide
In life the wave on which we ride
Can't stop this mountain moving on
Every thought of mine is gone

Wish there was more to life then this
Just more then to merely exist
The Dance for the puppet master is on
We have less brain then brawn
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Are we all puppets to the Master?
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I'd assume most of us are.
Well done....And very thought provoking...

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For all the pain in the world...you know none until you take my hand.
Well it depends on the person :)

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One man that has a mind and knows it can always beat ten men who haven't and don't.
-George Bernard Shaw
Indeed..Thank you

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One man that has a mind and knows it can always beat ten men who haven't and don't.
-George Bernard Shaw
You finally seemed to execute my point!

"Now or Never, it's my time to decide
In life the wave on which we ride
Can't stop this mountain moving on
Every thought of mine is gone

Wish there was more to life then this
Just more then to merely exist
The Dance for the puppet master is on
We have less brain then brawn
"

That is absolutely what I've been looking for out of you. Thank you. It could use a FEW (VERY FEW) punctuation additions. (Maybe one or two). But I am so glad you've displayed this smoothness, this flow. Great job.

I edited your spelling of "brawn" and "exist" btw.

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Always test thy faith.
Ah thank you very much..stil no fav though..huh Imust have to work hard to get a fav outta you..I will try ever harder now..and I will fixy the mistakes... :)

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One man that has a mind and knows it can always beat ten men who haven't and don't.
-George Bernard Shaw
Fix the spelling, and I'll favorite it, lol.

Seriously I had already thought that.

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Always test thy faith.
Spelling fixed mate..and finally I worked hard to get a fav outta you..lol :) :nod:

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One man that has a mind and knows it can always beat ten men who haven't and don't.
-George Bernard Shaw
Your next goal ought to be to get a favorite out of me without fixing thing.

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Always test thy faith.
nice :P

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"Life isn't about waiting for a storm to pass, its about learning to dance in the rain." :P

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