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A loser is what we're called
From the lonely to enthralled
No matter who we are outside
We are people and we must abide

We are the quiet ones
We are the only sons
We stand alone with our dreams
We are the ones forging new seams

Caring for others, only to be forgot
All the help we give, our support for naught
We try to be there in times of need
We were there but now forgotten indeed

The outcasts of this sad world
The true nature coming unfurled
Why does nobody notice us
And we are the ones that suffer thus
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I am a loser...

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:iconnon-numerus:
I have little time, but that is a nice poem. I think were should change to we're or we are, and seems to seams.

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"It is easier to be critical than correct."
-Benjamin Disraeli
:iconbbelill:
i agree with :iconNun-Numerus: about the grammer and spelling,

but other than that, i love this, great job..

ps- im a loser too

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Ceade mile failte

Come away! O, human child!
To the woods and waters wild,
With a fairy hand in hand,
For the world's more full of weeping than
you can understand-W.B. Yeats :icongeekflirt:
:iconlumaris:
Heh...hehe... *waves* I'm a loser if that there describes a loser, that is most definitely I. *bows* =P

Not that I'm proud of things like that happening to me. x_x On contraire(sp?), it's tiresome to put effort in helping people who are just going to ignore it all, and if they do take the help, never at all send a thanks or whatever :hmm: Sometimes it discourages me from even giving a rat's butt what goes on in their life. But. *sigh* it'd be impossible to not feel like doing what I can.

Written very well too, good work. :clap:

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- My Word!-
:iconcletusjackson:
thank you..not sure who you are but thank you ;)

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One man that has a mind and knows it can always beat ten men who haven't and don't.
-George Bernard Shaw
:iconcletusjackson:
Thanks ;)

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One man that has a mind and knows it can always beat ten men who haven't and don't.
-George Bernard Shaw
:iconcletusjackson:
Thank you... :) I see your effort and I except it... ;)

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One man that has a mind and knows it can always beat ten men who haven't and don't.
-George Bernard Shaw
:iconblaydrix:
I'm a... oh wait, you already knew that.

I like this one. :+fav:

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I'll admit it. I'm a Gleek.
:iconcletusjackson:
thank you... :) aren't we all just losers?

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One man that has a mind and knows it can always beat ten men who haven't and don't.
-George Bernard Shaw
:iconinnocencedied2nite:
Like the flow of this one.. my edits were already mentioned.
It appears the I too am one...* sigh* though I am not sure that is nessarly a bad thing.
I love all of this.. but these were the lines that touched me the most

Caring for others, only to be forgot
All the help we give, our support for naught
We try to be there in times of need
We were there but now forgotten indeed

Well Done

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Eyes are in the Beauty of the Beholder :crazy:
:rose::butterflytwo:

Aang:"You're insane, aren't you?"
Old Woman: "Thaaaat's Right!"
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My Club *Project-Be-Bold Dare to be heard!
:iconcletusjackson:
Thank you...I'm so happy you liked it

--
One man that has a mind and knows it can always beat ten men who haven't and don't.
-George Bernard Shaw

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