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Your words make me smile
Your eloquence and style
Are designed to bring cheer
Every time you call me dear

I can't let you be sad for long
You're a great person and strong
Your heart and mind are unmatched
All your fear and doubt are dispatched

You must rise above your sadness
Keep on reaching for the bliss
Remember that people like me exist
Even when the bad memories persist

I will always be your friend
I will always have time to lend
For a person as nice as you
I hope you see that I care too
OK this is another for my friend Kyaku22 :iconkyaku22: ...she is sad and I cheer up...what do you guys think...and besides the Grammar error of Your and you're any other mistakes?

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crazymorals Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2009   Traditional Artist
Awesome work man.
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CletusJackson Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2009
thanks
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frozenblackroses Featured By Owner Jun 20, 2008
great job!
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:iconcletusjackson:
CletusJackson Featured By Owner Jun 20, 2008
Thank you :)
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frozenblackroses Featured By Owner Jun 20, 2008
your welcome :]
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einnobztron Featured By Owner Apr 30, 2008  Student Writer
awww! I like it.
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CletusJackson Featured By Owner Apr 30, 2008
:) thanks
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einnobztron Featured By Owner May 1, 2008  Student Writer
any time
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Xhinkaiyu Featured By Owner Apr 26, 2008  Hobbyist General Artist
Very nice, I like it a lot. Each one of those sections seems like they'd be perfect for professional greeting cards, better perhaps. Anyway, I really enjoyed reading through it, it seems like one of your more longer poems. Keep'em coming!
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:iconcletusjackson:
CletusJackson Featured By Owner Apr 26, 2008
Thank you your critiques always seem in depth...very much appreciated
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fallenpoeticlover Featured By Owner Apr 24, 2008
It's very cute... like gentle and soft and just yea... cute.. I like it!
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:iconcletusjackson:
CletusJackson Featured By Owner Apr 25, 2008
thanks
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Faded2Indie Featured By Owner Apr 24, 2008  Student Writer
Its really really sweet... I hope it cheers her up. And you did a great job with the flow is this!
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:iconcletusjackson:
CletusJackson Featured By Owner Apr 25, 2008
thanks...
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Kurohyochan Featured By Owner Apr 24, 2008
:claps: So well done, and very emotional. <3
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CletusJackson Featured By Owner Apr 24, 2008
Thank you...I don't believe i have seen yuo before..how did you find me :) ...i'm a sneaky person....Glad you like and thanks for the fav ;)
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Kurohyochan Featured By Owner Apr 24, 2008
Haha, I come and go with the wind, and the wind tells me all...Naw, actually, a friend of mine faved this, and I was lurking her favs. :D I'll have to take the time and lurk the rest of your gallery. :D
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CletusJackson Featured By Owner Apr 24, 2008
Well thank you in advance for all the favs and comments you will leave and give me...that is prooly the cockyest things i ever said on here but people say i'm good...i just say i'm lucking and thanks for the watch...I'll watch back as well :) ...was it Sweetnut that you found me through?
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Kurohyochan Featured By Owner Apr 24, 2008
Lol, yup, it was Sweetnut. :XD: And I have a soft spot for peotry, so you may as well get used to the favs. :XD:
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CletusJackson Featured By Owner Apr 24, 2008
O I am used to it...lol..thank you very much for readin them...I am usualy humble and i always say i'm lucky not good though
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:iconkurohyochan:
Kurohyochan Featured By Owner Apr 24, 2008
Ha, everyone is thier own worst critic, don't worry about it. And you're welcome BTW.
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loudwisdom Featured By Owner Apr 24, 2008
very wel done, and i like the smoothness of the ryhme, that isnt easy to do. Great job
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:iconcletusjackson:
CletusJackson Featured By Owner Apr 24, 2008
Thank you again ...lol... ;)
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Kyaku22 Featured By Owner Apr 24, 2008
Omg. An amazing poem again ofcorse. Bravo. Thank you so much you made my day today awesome YAY.!!
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CletusJackson Featured By Owner Apr 24, 2008
Your welcome... :)
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Sweetnut Featured By Owner Apr 23, 2008
*tears* that ... was... soo... beautiful! if i have your permission, may i download this (all credit to u) and frame it and give it to someone?
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:iconcletusjackson:
CletusJackson Featured By Owner Apr 24, 2008
Of course you may you have my persission...I am so happy it means so much to you....That made me smile
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Sweetnut Featured By Owner Apr 24, 2008
:excited:yay!!!! just please dont take it down for a while :)
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:iconcletusjackson:
CletusJackson Featured By Owner Apr 24, 2008
oh it will stay up here as long as i stay here...thats a keeper...I'm just glad you like it :)
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Sweetnut Featured By Owner Apr 24, 2008
yay! tanks :D
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Lumaris Featured By Owner Apr 23, 2008  Student Digital Artist
aww that's so sweet! It rhymes smoothly; great work! I'm sure Kyaku will love it and give you an enormous glomp for it :XD:.
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CletusJackson Featured By Owner Apr 23, 2008
oh i'm sure she give me one anyway...lol...and thanks your the nice comments..i hope it brightens her day she doesn't need to bad sad...sad not good i just got over my depression...i don't like seeing friends sad..and if i can make them feel better i will try
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Lumaris Featured By Owner Apr 23, 2008  Student Digital Artist
I hope she feels better soon as well. :( I'm sure it'll brighten her day. It's nice of you to do what you can for your friends:hug:.
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CletusJackson Featured By Owner Apr 24, 2008
Thats just what i feel like i should do
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Lumaris Featured By Owner Apr 24, 2008  Student Digital Artist
:)
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student-4-ever Featured By Owner Apr 23, 2008   Photographer
:clap: LOVE!
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CletusJackson Featured By Owner Apr 23, 2008
YAY...thanks...It better cheer up Kyaku...it seems to work espically when there for her...thats in #2 for her...and besides the girl i love thats the most anybody has gotten about them...but my girl outranks with her #30+ lol..just an estimate..but it's more then 30...so i think that wins but hey...Kyaku is the only other to have a personal poem for her let alone 2...;)
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student-4-ever Featured By Owner Apr 23, 2008   Photographer
Cool! I hope she likes it. ;)
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CletusJackson Featured By Owner Apr 23, 2008
Me too thats why I wrote it...she gonna write one for me too ;) ...i guess we'll see tomorrow
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student-4-ever Featured By Owner Apr 23, 2008   Photographer
:fingerscrossed:
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CletusJackson Featured By Owner Apr 23, 2008
lol ;)
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Blaydrix Featured By Owner Apr 23, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
Bah, just noticed your comment about the Your You're error. Never mind.
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:iconcletusjackson:
CletusJackson Featured By Owner Apr 23, 2008
lol..see...i know i screwed them up...i always do...so i figured i might as well make it known ahead of time...lol...and i fixed that line...lol :)
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Blaydrix Featured By Owner Apr 23, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
ah, good.
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Blaydrix Featured By Owner Apr 23, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
I like this one.

Critique time:

"I can't let to be sad for long" - WTF fix

Learn the difference between "Your" and "You're"
There is a difference. "Your" is possessive while "You're" means "You are."
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CletusJackson Featured By Owner Apr 23, 2008
yea i know the difference but i hate grammar...lol...of course who does like it..and damn ithought i wouldn't have eroors beside the yours'
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Blaydrix Featured By Owner Apr 23, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
I LIEK IT LOL

well, not really, but I follow it religiously :3
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:iconcletusjackson:
CletusJackson Featured By Owner Apr 23, 2008
Blah then..I hate grammar...go figure since i'm a writer of sorts...lol
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:iconblaydrix:
Blaydrix Featured By Owner Apr 23, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
lol irony
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:iconcletusjackson:
CletusJackson Featured By Owner Apr 23, 2008
That is the life of most writers...if i can be called that
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